Thesis Statement Blog

Erin Meierbachtol

Thesis Statement

Identify the weak thesis statement:

A: I’m going to write about The jeans industry targets its advertisements to apple to young adults.

B: Othello is a play about love and jealousy.

In this statement (B) is the weaker of the two thesis, it leaves no open to were the story or point may be going. Othello could be jealousy over many things and what or who, is he in loved with.

1.       The jean industry may only have one leg to stand one, getting the attention of younger buyers to help their business.

2.       This statement is weak and un-supporting to accurately what the point is to make.

A: The punk rock group Minor Threat uses emotional lyrics to appeal to their target audience, which considers itself individualistic and therefore the lyrics must convey a message of individuality.

This is more of a personal point of view than an overall type of view, this is weak an inconsiderable.

My thesis statement:

In Atwood’s book was it possible that many of their items can from the black market ?

In Margret Atwood’s The Handmaid’s Tale, the book makes a mention about buying products from the black market, such items like cigarettes. The hand maids are left to conjecture about this so called black market and maybe it offering freedom to them.  In Atwood’s book page (55) the girls are speaking about dresses “ the summer dresser are unpacked and hanging in the closet, two of them, pure cotton, which is better than synthetics like the cheaper ones, though even so, when it’s muggy, in July and August, you sweat inside them’’

I think this is a great stamen because it may be dresses that they purchased from the black market or forced to buy cheaper dresses because that’s all they can have. Either way I think it’s showing a point of how hot it can get in the summer months and like many people wearing cotton can be unbearable.